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Post by RaNdOmPeRsOn on Jul 16, 2013 17:17:31 GMT
On another planet(Felaxa) far away, there was a group of cat people (Felines) living peacefully, until one day an asteroid crashed into Falexa. The asteroid was really a ship from another planet (Reptilia). The Reptilians were lizard people, who decided to take over the planet. The Felines fled to the far end of the planet, and started a military of Ninjas. Now the 2 races are at war; they have battles and hopefully the Felines can claim back their planet! There are also other dangers and missions to be completed so good luck!
-Ninja training
-Adventures
-Magicalnessness
-Create a character, traits, looks etc....
-RaNdOmPeRsOn
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Post by Jayfeather on Jul 16, 2013 17:33:33 GMT
There is capitalized when it should be lowercase.
Peacefully is capitalized when it should be lowercase.
It looks like you were trying to keep going to 'until one day' but instead you put a period and made it a new sentence which makes no sense.
No period after (Raxica).
The is lowercased when it should be capitalized.
Fled is capitalized when it should be lowercased.
I told you to check punctuation. You obviously did not.
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Post by RaNdOmPeRsOn on Jul 16, 2013 17:37:42 GMT
There is capitalized when it should be lowercase. Peacefully is capitalized when it should be lowercase. It looks like you were trying to keep going to 'until one day' but instead you put a period and made it a new sentence which makes no sense. No period after (Raxica). The is lowercased when it should be capitalized. Fled is capitalized when it should be lowercased. I told you to check punctuation. You obviously did not. changed it XD |
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